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What scares you most about the future?

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Future is unpredictable.
It is why future is scare.
We feel scary when we are in the room that doesn't have any lights. it is same thing.
People feel scary when you can't see anything.
So many people work harder, in order to raise predictability of their life.

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Hello JT!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Future is unpredictable.

>> The future is unpredictable.
It is why future is scare.

>> It is why the future is scary.
We feel scary when we are in the room that doesn't have any lights. it is same thing.

>> We feel scared when we are in a room that doesn't have any lights. it is the same thing.
People feel scary when you can't see anything.

>> People feel scared when they can't see anything.
So many people work harder, in order to raise predictability of their life.

>> So many people work harder in order to raise the predictability of their life.

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