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Hi there, Donna.
Today is tuesday, and many days remain before weekend.
I hope that everything in my clinic will be ok without any trouble this week.
Meanwhile, it's raining outside.
However, it's not too much at this time.
Ah, I have a good news.
I received some fresh seafood and fish for holiday present today.
Thus, my wife is cooking those foods.
After this homework, I can eat them with a beer.
What a nice supper!!
Okay, back to my homework, you asked me about Korean cosmetics.
Many people like Korean cosmetics.
I think that's because Korean cosmetics are well known for many countries.
Those cosmetics have a good smell, high quality applying feeling, and many functional ingredients.
And very famous entertainers are models for them.
Lots of people think that if they apply the cosmetics, they can look like those entertainers.
But, that is not true.
In fact, those models don't use those cosmetics, they have a good appearance because they are born to be great.
Good night, see you.

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Hello, Dr. Kim!

Apologies for being able to revert to your homework just now. Nonetheless, I am glad to know about your mouth-watering supper. I am sure it was a delightful one especially with the beer. I like seafood with white wine. Anyway, I hope that your weather will not be as severe as the previous typhoon that flooded some parts of your country. 

Good looks if not a gift from God are primarily inherited form our parents. We cannot deny the fact that some people command attention with their physical beauty. So, they probably have less concerns regarding cosmetics because washing their face could be enough. Now, since South Korea is a mecca of quality cosmetics and plastic surgery, it has helped women and men look better. However, there are still some who appreciate natural beauty. Cosmetics should never be the end and all of how we are deemed beautiful by society but the contributions we make to make others live better and have a beautiful too.

Thank you for your journal- type exposition. I appreciate your daily sharing of some interesting events made more colorful via your writing. A few grammar suggestions can create even more sophistication to your composition. Go through them carefully. Amazing writing!

Catch you in class, good afternoon!

-T. Donna~

Hi there, Donna.
>> Correct!

Today is tuesday, and many days remain before weekend.
>>  Today is Tuesday, and many days remain before the weekend.

I hope that everything in my clinic will be ok without any trouble this week.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, it's raining outside.
>> Correct!

However, it's not too much at this time.
>> Correct!

Ah, I have a good news.
>> Correct!

I received some fresh seafood and fish for holiday present today.
>> I received some fresh seafood and fish for a holiday present today.

Thus, my wife is cooking those foods.
>> Correct!

After this homework, I can eat them with a beer.
>> After this homework, I can eat them with (a can of beer/ beer).

What a nice supper!!
>> Correct!
Or: What a nice supper!

Okay, back to my homework, you asked me about Korean cosmetics.
>> Correct!

Many people like Korean cosmetics.
>> Correct!

I think that's because Korean cosmetics are well known for many countries.
>> Correct!

Those cosmetics have a good smell, high quality applying feeling, and many functional ingredients.
>> Correct!

And very famous entertainers are models for them.
>> Correct!
Or: (And/ Most of all,) very famous entertainers are models for them.

Lots of people think that if they apply the cosmetics, they can look like those entertainers.
>> Correct!

But, that is not true.
>> Correct!

In fact, those models don't use those cosmetics, they have a good appearance because they are born to be great.
>> In fact, those models don't use those cosmetics, they have good appearances because they were born to be great.

Good night, see you.
>> Correct!
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