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Talk about your favorite vacation/trip you had with your family. Where did you go? What did you see there? What did you do there? What did you eat? Did you like it there? How was your overall experience? Use at least 3 to 4 short paragraphs.

As I grow up, our family couldn't go trip gradually. Long before I went to abroad trip, Philippines. this is my first overseas trip with my family! so my favorite vacation.
That times I went to the Boracai. I saw beautiful sight. color of the sea is like emerald :-)
I did snorkeling, too. very exciting! I couldn't forget that trip's relaxation!

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Hello there, Emma! You did great with your composition today. You were able to share complete information about your favorite vacation. I am very pleased with your sentence construction. Thank you very much Emma! :)

As I grow up, our family couldn't go trip gradually.
>> As I was growing up, our family wasn't able to go on trips often.
Long before I went to abroad trip, Philippines.
>> I went to the Philippines before.
this is my first overseas trip with my family! so my favorite vacation.
>> This was my first overseas trip with my family, it's my favorite vacation.
That times I went to the Boracai.
>> We went to Boracay that time.
I saw beautiful sight. color of the sea is like emerald :-)
>>The color of the sea was like an emerald, it was a very beautiful sight.
I did snorkeling, too. very exciting!
>> I went snorkeling too, it was very exciting.
I couldn't forget that trip's relaxation!
>> I will never forget that relaxing trip!
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