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Does education guarantee a good job?

작성자: 황*하
2022-08-29 782

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It is true that people who are educated well get a better job but there are a lot of people who don't get a job although they graduated from the best university in Korea. There are many reasons why they don't have a job. One of the reasons can be a high education. Many people misunderstand that they are well trained workers due to their school's name but we have experienced that people who have studied a lot don't always show high performance. I believe that high educated people are not suitable for factory workers or business men because most of them are good at teaching students or writing research papers. To disscuss this subject, we have to define what is a good job and a bad job. Most people believe that a job which earn a lot of money is better than accupations which make a small amount of money. If the standard of evaluation is money, it is almost true that high educated people get a better job.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

It is true that people who are educated well get a better job but there are a lot of people who don't get a job although they graduated from the best university in Korea. 
>> CORRECT! 
OR >> It is true that people who are educated well get a better job but there are a lot of people who don't get a job although they graduated from prestigious uiniversities in Korea. 
There are many reasons why they don't have a job. 
>> CORRECT! 
One of the reasons can be a high education. 
>> CORRECT! 
Many people misunderstand that they are well trained workers due to their school's name but we have experienced that people who have studied a lot don't always show high performance. 
>> CORRECT! 
I believe that high educated people are not suitable for factory workers or business men because most of them are good at teaching students or writing research papers. 
>> CORRECT! 
To disscuss this subject, we have to define what is a good job and a bad job. 
>> CORRECT! 
Most people believe that a job which earn a lot of money is better than accupations which make a small amount of money. 
>> Most people believe that a job which earn a lot of money is better than opccupations which make a small amount of money. 
If the standard of evaluation is money, it is almost true that high educated people get a better job.
>> CORRECT! 

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