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Where do you like to live, in the city or outside the city?

I prefer to live in the city.
In fact, I have never lived outside the city.
I often stay in the country to be refreshed for one or two days.
Looking around the natural environment, I feel comfortable and lose in thoughts.
However, there is more inconvenient than cities because of lack of many convinient facilities and entertainment facilities.
I like shopping, and I could find department stores and shopping malls easily in the city.
Also, many famous and fancy restaurants are concentrated in the city.
If I want to watch the movie and musicals, theaters are easily accessible in the city.
Because of these convienience, I enjoy to live in the city.

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Hi there, Dr. Stella!

It is interesting to know that you are a 'city person' who sometimes finds refuge in the rural areas. I must agree that facilities definitely make our lives cozy and more enjoyable. On the contrary, the rural environment is a sight to behold and offers peace and tranquility. 

Thank you so much for sending your homework answer early today! As usual, grammar suggestions are very few. Moreover, your writing style is direct and artistic. Some were underscored for your conveninece, go over them  well. I had a good time reading your ideas on your answer. Keep up the great work always.

Catch you later!

-T. Donna~

I prefer to live in the city.
>> Correct!

In fact, I have never lived outside the city.
>> Correct!

I often stay in the country to be refreshed for one or two days.
>> Correct!

Looking around the natural environment, I feel comfortable and lose in thoughts.
>> Looking around the natural environment, I feel comfortable and lost in thoughts.

However, there is more inconvenient than cities because of lack of many convinient facilities and entertainment facilities.
>> However, the rural areas are more inconvenient than cities because of lack of many convenient facilities and entertainment facilities.

I like shopping, and I could find department stores and shopping malls easily in the city.
>> Corect!

Also, many famous and fancy restaurants are concentrated in the city.
>> Correct!

If I want to watch the movie and musicals, theaters are easily accessible in the city.
>> Correct!

Because of these convienience, I enjoy to live in the city.
>> Because of these convieniences, I enjoy living in the city.
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