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Dear Queeny
Well, It`s a simple question for me. please describe the area around your neighborhood
Actually, I have been taken almost 11 years long to move my place in Seoul city songpagu munjungdong
So, I lived in Seoul city where I almost 13 years. I had lived in Kyungkido before I had moved here in Seoul city
My home which is full of my confidence and love is always bright mood
Our neighborhood is always kind and generous. sometimes I and my neighborhood met a elevator, We say hello to each other
And, one more thing I can explain to you is my living place munjungdong is quite a crowed people because this place is near by a little bit of Gang-nam. Did you heard of that area Gang-nam? Right! The PSY have a world of big hit song "Gang-nam Style" where our place munjungdong is quite a bit of nearby.
It takes a 10 minutes so far nearyby Gang-nam
Well. that`s it. Have a great weekend teacher Queenny

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Dear Queeny
Well, It`s a simple question for me. please describe the area around your neighborhood.
Dear Quenny
Well, It`s a simple question for me. Please describe the area around your neighborhood.
Actually, I have been taken almost 11 years long to move my place in Seoul city songpagu munjungdong.
>> Actually, it took me almost 11 years long to move place in Seoul city Songpagu Munjungdong.
So, I lived in Seoul city where I almost 13 years. I had lived in Kyungkido before I had moved here in Seoul city.
>> So, I'm living in Seoul city for almost 13 years. I had lived in Kyungkido before I moved here to Seoul city.
My home which is full of my confidence and love is always bright mood.
>>My home which is full of my confidence and love is always in a bright mood.
Our neighborhood is always kind and generous. sometimes I and my neighborhood met a elevator, We say hello to each other.
>>  Our neighborhood is always kind and generous. Sometimes my neighborhood and I met in an elevator and we say "hello" to each other.
And, one more thing I can explain to you is my living place munjungdong is quite a crowed people because this place is near by a little bit of Gang-nam. 
>> And, one more thing I want to share with you about my place in Munjundong. My place was quite crowded with people because the place is a little bit nearby Gang-nam.
Did you heard of that area Gang-nam? Right! The PSY have a world of big hit song "Gang-nam Style" where our place munjungdong is quite a bit of nearby.
>> Did you hear about the Gang-nam area? Right! The PSY song has a world of big hit songs "Gang-nam Style" where our place Munjungdong is a little bit nearby. 
It takes a 10 minutes so far nearyby Gang-nam.
>>Munjundong takes only 10 minutes from Gang-nam.
Well. that`s it. 
>> Well, that`s it. 
Have a great weekend teacher Queenny
>> Have a great weekend teacher Quenny 
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Dear Queeny
Well, It`s a simple question for me. please describe the area around your neighborhood
Actually, I have been taken almost 11 years long to move my place in Seoul city songpagu munjungdong
So, I lived in Seoul city where I almost 13 years. I had lived in Kyungkido before I had moved here in Seoul city
My home which is full of my confidence and love is always bright mood
Our neighborhood is always kind and generous. sometimes I and my neighborhood met a elevator, We say hello to each other
And, one more thing I can explain to you is my living place munjungdong is quite a crowed people because this place is near by a little bit of Gang-nam. Did you heard of that area Gang-nam? Right! The PSY have a world of big hit song "Gang-nam Style" where our place munjungdong is quite a bit of nearby.
It takes a 10 minutes so far nearyby Gang-nam
Well. that`s it. Have a great weekend teacher Queenny
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