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Do you agree that the minimum age for legally punishing offenders/criminals should be lowered to 10

작성자: 황*하
2022-08-26 1009

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Although, there are nationwide concerns about juvenile crimes, it doesn't look like easy to lower the minimum age of criminal responsibility. Recent data has showed that crimes committed by criminal minors have been on the rise and underage crimes have grown crueler and more violent because many children know that they are unpurnished if they are under 14 years old, even if they committed murder. It is a controversial issue, one side insist that heavier punishment isn't effective to decrease crime rate. On the other hands, it is already proved in other countries that lowerring the minimum age of punishment can prevent potential crimes. There are a lot of opinions about it, I think that any criminals must be punished by the national law regardless ages and they have to be removed from the society for a certain period because issuing fines or suspended prison terms has little effect on teenage offenders. However, there should be tranning programs or facilities which help criminals be

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Although, there are nationwide concerns about juvenile crimes, it doesn't look like easy to lower the minimum age of criminal responsibility. 
>> CORRECT!
Recent data has showed that crimes committed by criminal minors have been on the rise and underage crimes have grown crueler and more violent because many children know that they are unpurnished if they are under 14 years old, even if they committed murder. 
>> Recent data has showed that crimes committed by minor criminals have been on the rise and underage crimes have grown crueler and more violent because many children know that they are unpunished if they are under 14 years old, even if they committed murder. 
It is a controversial issue, one side insist that heavier punishment isn't effective to decrease crime rate. 
>> It is a controversial issue, one side insists that heavier punishment isn't effective to decrease crime rate. 
On the other hands, it is already proved in other countries that lowerring the minimum age of punishment can prevent potential crimes. 
>> On the other hand, it is already proven in other countries that lowering the minimum age of punishment can prevent potential crimes. 
There are a lot of opinions about it, I think that any criminals must be punished by the national law regardless ages and they have to be removed from the society for a certain period because issuing fines or suspended prison terms has little effect on teenage offenders. 
>> There are a lot of opinions about it, I think that any criminals must be punished by the national law regardless of age, and they have to be isolated from the society for a certain period because issuing fines or suspended prison terms have little effect on teenage offenders. 
However, there should be tranning programs or facilities which help criminals be
>> However, there should be training programs or any facilities which help criminals in coping with certain situations, and be in good state.
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