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Can you talk about a person who has influenced your life?

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Michelle Obama has influenced me the most. She is well known as the wife of former U.S. President Barack Obama.
First, she was an elite student enough to graduate from Harvard Law School, and despite discrimination against blacks, she overwhelmed everything with her outstanding ability. I want to develop my skills and become a person who can prove my value with outstanding ability against any discrimination that I will encounter in my life.
Second, Michelle Obama wrote an autobiography called "Becoming" and she is now inspiring many people including me. Actually, this is a book that made me set Michelle Obama as my role model. I always wanted to write an autobiography someday. I have a big dream I hope the story of my life can inspire many people. And it was Michelle Obama who achieved these dreams, so I want to follow her.

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Hello Olivia!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Michelle Obama has influenced me the most. 

>> CORRECT!


She is well known as the wife of former U.S. President Barack Obama.

>> CORRECT!


First, she was an elite student enough to graduate from Harvard Law School, and despite discrimination against blacks, she overwhelmed everything with her outstanding ability. 

>> First, she was an elite student to graduate from Harvard Law School and despite discrimination against blacks, she overwhelmed everyone with her outstanding ability. 

I want to develop my skills and become a person who can prove my value with outstanding ability against any discrimination that I will encounter in my life.

>> CORRECT!


Second, Michelle Obama wrote an autobiography called "Becoming" and she is now inspiring many people including me. 

>> CORRECT!

Actually, this is a book that made me set Michelle Obama as my role model. 

>> CORRECT!

I always wanted to write an autobiography someday. 

>> CORRECT!

I have a big dream I hope the story of my life can inspire many people.

>> I have a big dream and I hope the story of my life can inspire many people.

 And it was Michelle Obama who achieved these dreams, so I want to follow her.

>> It was Michelle Obama who achieved these dreams, so I want to follow her.

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