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HOMEWORK:
How have cars improved our lives or have caused more problems than benefits? Answer in a few sentences.

I think we have more benefits than problems. we have spent a comfortable time since the invention of a car. Automobile help us save time and go fast. And, the air pollution problem caused by cars will be solved with the development of electric cars.

Thank you Donna!

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Good evening, Hae Ju!

Cars are really heaven sent. They not only take us safely to where we need to go, we can save time and use it for other important tasks. Thus, it gave us more comfort than disadvantages. 

From your homework answer, your points were very clear and the supporting ideas are short but very meaningful. Keep up the very good arguments in your answers. Moreover, the grammar suggestions were underlined and some words have been deleted. Take time to review them below.

Have a pleasant evening.

-T. Donna~

I think we have more benefits than problems. 
>> Correct!

we have spent a comfortable time since the invention of a car. 
>> We have spent comfortable times since the invention of cars. 

Automobile help us save time and go fast. 
>> An automobile helps us save time and go fast. 

And, the air pollution problem caused by cars will be solved with the development of electric cars.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

Thank you Donna!
>> Correct!
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