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What are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping at a mall?

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Mall has many interesting things. But shopping at a mall has advantage and also disadvantage. First the advantage of shopping at a mall is that we can see items directly and we can check the item's actuality by myself. And the disadvantage is that we should go to mall on foot inconveniently and it takes a lot of time. Anyway, I like shopping!

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Mall has many interesting things. But shopping at a mall has advantage and also disadvantage. 

>> The mall has many interesting things but shopping at a mall has an advantage and also disadvantage. 

First the advantage of shopping at a mall is that we can see items directly and we can check the item's actuality by myself.

>> The advantages of shopping at a mall is that we can see items directly and we can check the item's actuality by ourselves.

 And the disadvantage is that we should go to mall on foot inconveniently and it takes a lot of time. 

>> The disadvantage is that we should go to the mall on foot inconveniently and it takes a lot of time. 

Anyway, I like shopping!

>> CORRECT!


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