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작성자: 함*주
2022-08-22 811

회원님의 영작문

Should there be nutrition lessons in school?

I think it's just the thing that we should know in our daily life, we don't need to learn technical knowledge though. Even though we are not apply this knowledge everyday life, it is totally different from eating something bad knowing that this isn't good for our health to eating something bad not knowing the bad effect on our health.
For example, if we eat some fast food, we might feel guilty and try to make up for the harm with more healthy food. And when we feel unwell, we are able to know which food or which nutrient we need to eat.
I am sure that just by eating right food, we can be heal or prevent lots of disease.
I want to say that not only nutrition lessons but also other kinds of lessons which look like it doesn't need for students to go to collage are needed for student to learn.
Like we should take various kinds of nutrients for our health, we have to learn a variety of things like athletics, art, music, and so on for our lives.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello KC!!!

Thank you for your homework... I can say that you are really happy and satisfied with your life.

Happiness will start from ourselves. What's inside our hearts can make you happy and sad, so we need to store happy thoughts and positive things inside our hearts so that good things will come out from it.

T. Jeny


Should there be nutrition lessons in school?
>>correct
I think it's just the thing that we should know in our daily life, we don't need to learn technical knowledge though.
>>I think it's just the thing that we should know in our daily life; we don't need to learn technical knowledge, though.
 Even though we are not apply this knowledge everyday life, it is totally different from eating something bad knowing that this isn't good for our health to eating something bad not knowing the bad effect on our health.
>> Even though we do not apply this knowledge in everyday life, it is totally different from eating something bad knowing that this isn't good for our health to eating something bad not knowing the bad effect on our health.
For example, if we eat some fast food, we might feel guilty and try to make up for the harm with more healthy food. 
>>correct
And when we feel unwell, we are able to know which food or which nutrient we need to eat.
>>correct
I am sure that just by eating right food, we can be heal or prevent lots of disease.
>>I am sure that just by eating the right food, we can heal or prevent lots of diseases.
I want to say that not only nutrition lessons but also other kinds of lessons which look like it doesn't need for students to go to collage are needed for student to learn.
>>I want to say that not only nutrition lessons but also other kinds of lessons everybody should learn.
Like we should take various kinds of nutrients for our health, we have to learn a variety of things like athletics, art, music, and so on for our lives.
>>correct
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