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How would you describe a healthy diet?

작성자: 박*태
2022-08-20 1628

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Dear Quenny
It`s the as same as yesterday question, so I decide to go how would you describe a healthy diet?
Initial thought. I think that we have a healthy diet something like that, It`s totally whole important idea.
Our body need to be done as having a healthy meal in the long run. As a result, our body make it possible what we are doing with eating
out some of healthy meal or poor instant meal.
I`m surely do prefer to eating healthy meal but little bit often times we face a short time of period with time line problem something like that. So unfortunately we arei nevitablely to eat a bit of unhealthy food certain period of time when we eat sometime
But, althought we feel those of ways, we will have a good mindset of keeping good healthy diet food
Ok let`s run through today`s writing theme, I`ll back of new theme of my homework, teacher Quenny

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용


Hi Justin,
A healthy diet is a diet that maintains or improves overall health and provides the body with essential nutrition. Therefore, a growing interest has been regarding the different approaches related to a healthy diet in order to prevent non-communicable diseases. And eating a healthy diet is not about strict limitations, staying unrealistically thin, or depriving yourself of the foods you love. Rather, it’s about feeling great, having more energy, improving your health, and boosting your mood. A better approach is to make a few small changes at a time. Keeping your goals modest can help you achieve more in the long term without feeling deprived or overwhelmed by a major diet overhaul. Think of planning a healthy diet as a number of small, manageable steps like adding a salad to your diet once a day. As your small changes become habits, you can continue to add more healthy choices. " Stay Healthy" ~ Teacher QUENNY..


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Dear Quenny
It`s the as same as yesterday question, so I decide to go how would you describe a healthy diet?
>> Dear Quenny
It`s the as same as yesterday's question, so I decide to go how would you describe a healthy diet?
Initial thought. I think that we have a healthy diet something like that, It`s totally whole important idea.
>> Initial thought. I think that we need to have a healthy diet or something like that and it`s totally whole important idea.
Our body need to be done as having a healthy meal in the long run. As a result, our body make it possible what we are doing with eating out some of healthy meal or poor instant meal.
>> Our body needs to be done as having a healthy meal in the long run. As a result, our body makes it possible what we are doing by eating out some healthy meal or poor instant meal.
I`m surely do prefer to eating healthy meal but little bit often times we face a short time of period with time line problem something like that.
>> I surely do prefer to eat a healthy meal but often a few unhealthy foods like junk foods when we face a short time period with our timeline problem or something like that. 
 So unfortunately we arei nevitablely to eat a bit of unhealthy food certain period of time when we eat sometime
>> So, unfortunately, it's inevitable to eat a bit of unhealthy food like fast food during a certain period of time when we eat out. 
But, althought we feel those of ways, we will have a good mindset of keeping good healthy diet food.
>> But, although we feel those ways, we will have a good mindset of keeping good healthy diet food.
Ok let`s run through today`s writing theme, I`ll back of new theme of my homework, teacher Quenny
>> Ok let`s run through today`s writing theme, I`ll back to the new theme of my homework, teacher Quenny
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Dear Quenny
It`s the as same as yesterday question, so I decide to go how would you describe a healthy diet?
Initial thought. I think that we have a healthy diet something like that, It`s totally whole important idea.
Our body need to be done as having a healthy meal in the long run. As a result, our body make it possible what we are doing with eating
out some of healthy meal or poor instant meal.
I`m surely do prefer to eating healthy meal but little bit often times we face a short time of period with time line problem something like that. So unfortunately we arei nevitablely to eat a bit of unhealthy food certain period of time when we eat sometime
But, althought we feel those of ways, we will have a good mindset of keeping good healthy diet food
Ok let`s run through today`s writing theme, I`ll back of new theme of my homework, teacher Quenny
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