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Homework

작성자: 김*우
2022-08-19 844

회원님의 영작문

Happy Friday, Donna.
I've spent all my energy these weekdays, nonetheless, I feel good.
That's because I did well in various kinds of works.
Above all, I saw patients without any big mistake.
In addition, I taught a doctor successfully.
Also, I solved the problem of relationships between staffs.
Today, you gave me a homework about borrowing.
As you know, as I am an owner of the business(I mean, my clinic), I had to borrow much money from several banks.
Though I paid back every month, Lots of dept have remained.
Moreover, I borrowed a lot of money from a bank to pay a deposit of this house.
One more thing is my car.
My convertible car is owned by lease company.
There is a water purifier In my house.
Can you guess?
Of course, that is also rental.
Recently, I borrowed a luxury slipper from my doctor colleague, because he bought more expensive slipper.
Officially, He lent me his shoes, but I think that one is mine now. LOL.
What are you going to do this weekend?
Have a blast!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi! Happy weekend, Dr. Kim!

Your week had been so productive, cheers to all of your accomplishments! The hardwork of your entire team and you as a leader are now slowly but surely paying off. I hope that your clinic will remain harmonious and stay focused to your vision and mission to serve your clients to the best that you can.

Now, borrowing is one thing that is not totally inevitable but we ought to do especially in a country like yours. I did it too for some little amount for my house. I couldn't sleep well that time. ^^ In a documentary about finance, it was mentioned there how people keep working and earning but still a big salary is not enough to pay debts nowadays. This can be tough. A steady flow of income then is necessary and for some, a business side hustle if possible.

Anyway, borrowing means giving back in good terms and according to the conditions set both by the renter and the rentee. Then, I hope that all of your debts in the bank will all be settled as soon as you can.

Your homework answer is complete with details, rich in appropriate vocabulary, and always smooth and stylish. Check out the underlined words/ letters for the suggestions.

This weekend, I'm just going to be a home buddy after the radio. I will watch Top Gun: Maverick later. Wishing you and your lawyer friend, and all of your kids and your spouses will have an enjoyable weekend!

See you soon!

-T. Donna~

Happy Friday, Donna.
>> Correct!

I've spent all my energy these weekdays, nonetheless, I feel good.
>> Correct!

That's because I did well in various kinds of works.
>> Correct!

Above all, I saw patients without any big mistake.
>> Correct!
Or: Above all, I saw patients without any big mistakes.

In addition, I taught a doctor successfully.
>> Correct!

Also, I solved the problem of relationships between staffs.
>> Correct!

Today, you gave me a homework about borrowing.
>> Correct!

As you know, as I am an owner of the business(I mean, my clinic), I had to borrow much money from several banks.
>> As you know, as I am an owner of a business(I mean, my clinic), I had to borrow much money from several banks.

Though I paid back every month, Lots of dept have remained.
>> Although I paid back every month, lots of debts have remained.

Moreover, I borrowed a lot of money from a bank to pay a deposit of this house.
>> Correct!

One more thing is my car.
>> Correct!

My convertible car is owned by lease company.
>> My convertible car is owned by a lease company.

There is a water purifier In my house.
>> Correct!
Or: There is a water purifier in my house. 

Can you guess?
>> Correct!

Of course, that is also rental.
>> Correct!
Or: Of courese, it is also from the rental.

Recently, I borrowed a luxury slipper from my doctor colleague, because he bought more expensive slipper.
>> Recently, I borrowed a luxury slipper from my doctor colleague because he bought a more expensive slipper.

Officially, He lent me his shoes, but I think that one is mine now. LOL.
>> Correct!
Or: Officially, he lent me his shoes, but I think that one is mine now. LOL.

What are you going to do this weekend?
>> Correct!

Have a blast!
>> Correct!
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