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What are the toughest jobs in the world?

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The toughest job is president. Once, it is not easy to be a president. and they must have the end days.
They have their entried time. They know that it will come end day from the first moment. That is unique thing.
President have to decision all about the country situations.
They might be make wrong decision and it comes to disaster.
They can not live to relex always state of tension.
I think mentaly hardship is harder than physical.
And their job don't pursue huge money they pursue peaceful and work for a sence of duty.
Because they must have a lot of responsibilities.
So many president go to the wrong ways. They used their powers for themselves profit.
So the president is tough, difficult and most important job.

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Hello Eun Chae!
I agree with your opinion.  But check your grammar and the vocabulary you have used as well as the corrections.  Having an open mind with good ideas will surely lead you to the right track of improving your skills. ^^


~T. Maine


The toughest job is president. 
>> Correct. 
Once, it is not easy to be a president. 
>>Correct. 
and they must have the end days.
>> And this job has end days. 
They have their entried time. 
>>They have their entry time. 
They know that it will come end day from the first moment. 
>> They know that it will come to an end one day from the first moment they have started their career. 
That is unique thing.
>> That is a unique thing. 
President have to decision all about the country situations.
>>The president has to decide all about the country's situation. 
They might be make wrong decision and it comes to disaster.
>> He might make wrong decisions and it might become a disaster. 
They can not live to relex always state of tension.
>>He cannot always have relaxation time because of the tension from the people.
I think mentaly hardship is harder than physical.
>> I think this job has mental hardship more than the physical one. 
And their job don't pursue huge money they pursue peaceful and work for a sence of duty.
>> And this job doesn't pursue a huge amount of money.   He should pursue peace and work for the sense of duty. 
Because they must have a lot of responsibilities.
>> It is because he has a lot of responsibilities. 
So many president go to the wrong ways. 
>> So many presidents go to the wrong direction. 
They used their powers for themselves profit.
>> Some used their power for their own profit. 
So the president is tough, difficult and most important job.
>> So being a president is a tough and the most important job among all. 

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