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Absolutely, the best feedback that I don't remember. But I guess it's important to receive the feedback. Because I can improve myself by getting feedback. So I always post the homework and read it that you write down again. :)

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Thank you for being so honest with today's homework, Elic. You're progress amazes me. :) Thank you for appreciating my feedback, especially in your homework. Always remember that feedback and constructive criticisms are there and are given to help you improve and grow in whatever you are learning! Keep up the good work, Elic! I'm so proud of you! :)


Absolutely, the best feedback that I don't remember.
>> Absolutely! However, I don't remember the best feedback I've gotten anymore.
But I guess it's important to receive the feedback.
>> But I guess it's important to receive feedback.
Because I can improve myself by getting feedback.
>> Correct.
So I always post the homework and read it that you write down again. :)
>> That's why I always post my homework and read the corrections you write down.
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