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What do you think of the music they play in supermarkets and elevators?

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2022-08-17 1212

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Almost supermarkets are playing the cheerful music.
It makes people funny and exciting.
It can be improve the purchase needs. It is one of the marketing method. And some markets playing classic music to relex customers. They pursuit rcomfortable atmosphere in shopping.
All of these music make me happy and feel better when I shopping.
Elevators also play the music. They usually play the classic and without lyrics. because we take a elevator very shot time. so we can not listen to whole music. Some expensive buliding's elevators also have good smells. It is match with music.
I think it will send me to fantastic places.

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Hello Eun Chae!
Music is really everywhere.  This is a good way to enjoy traveling, shopping, and even just roaming around.  Music is a part of our lives. Check your spelling and grammar in this homework.  Do better next time! ^^


~T. Maine

Almost supermarkets are playing the cheerful music.
>>Correct. 

It makes people funny and exciting.
>>It makes people feel fun and exciting while shopping. 

It can be improve the purchase needs. 
>>It can improve the purchase needs of everyone. 

It is one of the marketing method. 
>> It is one of the marketing methods. 

And some markets playing classic music to relex customers. 
>>And some markets play classical music to help customers relax. 

They pursuit rcomfortable atmosphere in shopping.
>> They pursue a comfortable atmosphere in shopping. 

All of these music make me happy and feel better when I shopping.
>> All of this music makes me happy and feel better when I go shopping. 

Elevators also play the music. 
>>The elevators also play some music. 

They usually play the classic and without lyrics. because we take a elevator very shot time.
>> They usually play instrumental music because we take the elevator for a short time. 

 so we can not listen to whole music. 
>> So we cannot listen to the whole music. 

Some expensive buliding's elevators also have good smells.
>> Some expensive building's elevators also have a good smell. 

 It is match with music.
>> It is a good match with the music. 

I think it will send me to fantastic places.
>> Correct. 


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