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What would life be like without books?

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Without books, we would not get any lesson easily. (I don't want to imagine..) In this society, many people face various kinds of problem. So, they have hard time. To overcome these problems, many people read books and they are comforted. And then, they be a better person. I think it means books influence people positively. So, I suppose, without books, people would feel so down. Also, I think we need to find a new thing which help people get relax.

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Hey, Kimberly! 

Thank you for submitting your homework. I totally agree that people would feel down and incomplete without books. In a way, books take us away from stressful conditions to wonderful dimensions. Also, it helps us to be more aware of different situations. 

I appreciate how you explained your point of view about this question. 

Keep it up!
~ Teacher Gela

Without books, we would not get any lesson easily. 
>> CORRECT
OR >> Without books, we would not get any lessons effortlessly.
(I don't want to imagine..) 
>> (I don't want to imagine it.) 
In this society, many people face various kinds of problem. 
>> In this society, many people face various kinds of problems. 
So, they have hard time. 
>> So, they have a hard time. 
OR >> In this society, many people face various kinds of problems, so they have a hard time.
To overcome these problems, many people read books and they are comforted. 
>> To overcome these problems, many people read books and feel comforted. 
And then, they be a better person.
>> And then, they become better people. 
I think it means books influence people positively. 
>> I think that books influence people positively.
So, I suppose, without books, people would feel so down. 
>> CORRECT
Also, I think we need to find a new thing which help people get relax.
>> Also, I think we need to find a new thing that helps people relax.
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