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What do you worry about the most these days?

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As a matter of fact, I worry about my second son the most. My first daughter and youngest son are on the right track in their schoolings. However, my second son falls behind at school. What's worse is that he is not interested in studying at all, compared with his siblings who do well at school and kindergarten. I know he is too young to have some dream which drives him to study hard. Therefore, I sometimes say to myself that I have to persevere and wait more to see what he develops in the future.

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Happy Friday, Steve! ^^,)

You naturally worry about your child's future as a parent.
It makes logical and is a necessary component of parenting. You're more likely to set boundaries and keep your child safe and on the correct path if you have a healthy amount of worry.

Thank you for this composition. I will talk to you again on Monday.
Have a good weekend!^^

__T. Mayleen :)



As a matter of fact, I worry about my second son the most.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: My second son is actually the one I'm most concerned about.
My first daughter and youngest son are on the right track in their schoolings.
>>> My first daughter and youngest son are on the right track in their schooling.
However, my second son falls behind at school.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: My second son, however, struggles in school.
What's worse is that he is not interested in studying at all, compared with his siblings who do well at school and kindergarten.
>>> What's worse is that he is not interested in studying at all, compared with his siblings, who do well at school and kindergarten.
I know he is too young to have some dream which drives him to study hard.
>>> I know he is too young to have some dream that drives him to study hard.
Therefore, I sometimes say to myself that I have to persevere and wait more to see what he develops in the future.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: As a result, I sometimes tell myself that I need to be patient and wait longer to watch how he grows in the future.
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