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Hi Gemma
I am going to the beach in this weekend with my husband and puppy Nana.
We call Mung Beach which is just for dogs.
It is located in Kangwon-do YangYang 3 hours form my place.
I have been the beach 3 years ago with my Nana.
There were many big and small dogs playing and swimming.
I remember that Nana also loved swimming and running on the beach with me and husband.
At that time,she had never seen the wave and sea in her life therefore she could not into the sea becasue of the wave.hihihihi
She didnot know when she can get into the sea because the sea comes and goes infornt of her foot again and agin.
She stared me for help. how cute she was ~~~
I hope she likes going to the beach again in this weekend although I and my husband will be tired.

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Ms. Eunice! 'Twas nice to know your weekend plans. You know I was thinking, I could also be your Nana. Hahaha so I could visit beautiful places. For me, I'll just do the usual things; laundry, house chores, choir practice, attend the church service and meeting some old friends. Sounds a little typical. Hahaha!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I am going to the beach this weekend with my husband and puppy Nana.
>>> CORRECT
We call Mung Beach which is just for dogs.
>>> We say Mung Beach that's just for dogs.
It is located in Kangwon-do YangYang 3 hours from my place.
>>> CORRECT
I have been to the beach 3 years ago with my Nana.
>>> CORRECT
There were many big and small dogs playing and swimming.
>>> CORRECT
I remember that Nana also loved swimming and running on the beach with me and my husband.
>>> CORRECT
At that time,she had never seen the wave and sea in her life therefore she could not into the sea becasue of the wave.hihihihi
>>> At that time, she had never seen the wave and sea in her life therefore she could not get into the sea because of the wave. hihihihi
She did not know when she can get into the sea because the sea comes and goes in front of her foot again and again.
>>> CORRECT
She stared me for help. how cute she was ~~~
>>> She stared at me for help. How cute she was. ~~~
I hope she likes going to the beach again this weekend although I and my husband will be tired.
>>> CORRECT
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