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Many people drink coffee to feel alert. Is there a better way to increase your concentration? How?

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I always start my day to drink a cup of coffee. I believe that it is the best way to increase my concentration. I have heard that it is better drinking coffee in a fasting because we can enjoy tasty of coffee itself very well. Some people have a problem to fall a sleep if they drink coffee but most people don't have any difficulties. Koreans really love coffees especially, branded coffees like Starbucks, Hollys and so on.
It is the best time to do my assignment in the morning because I can fully focus on what I do. However, if I have a side effect from coffees, I would drink a cup of tea. There are a lot of tea at market which are effect to relieve our body. Some tea is one of the ingreadients of herbal medication that are proved by scientists. Actually, tea is better beverages than coffee so, I think it is good alternatives to concentrate work.

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


I always start my day to drink a cup of coffee. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I start my day by drinking a cup of coffee.
I believe that it is the best way to increase my concentration. 
>> CORRECT!
I have heard that it is better drinking coffee in a fasting because we can enjoy tasty of coffee itself very well. 
>> I have heard that it is better to drink coffee fast because we can enjoy the taste of coffee itself very well. 
Some people have a problem to fall a sleep if they drink coffee but most people don't have any difficulties. 
>> CORRECT!
Koreans really love coffees especially, branded coffees like Starbucks, Hollys and so on.
>> Koreans really love coffee especially, branded coffees like Starbucks, Hollys, and so on.
It is the best time to do my assignment in the morning because I can fully focus on what I do.
>> CORRECT!
However, if I have a side effect from coffees, I would drink a cup of tea. 
>> However, if I have a side effect from drinking coffee, I would drink a cup of tea. 
There are a lot of tea at market which are effect to relieve our body. 
>> There are a lot of tea at markets which are effective to relieve our body. 
Some tea is one of the ingreadients of herbal medication that are proved by scientists. 
>> One tea's  ingredients is used for herbal medication that are proven by scientists. 
Actually, tea is better beverages than coffee so, I think it is good alternatives to concentrate work.
>> Actually, tea is a better beverage than coffee so, I think it is a good alternative to concentrate with work.
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