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What courses or subjects do you think should be added to school?
I think there are enough subjects in school now. So, I don¡¯t want to add any subjects or courses to school. In Korea, there are many subjects to do, there is Korean, society, history, math, science, English, technology and assumption, moral, etc.
What courses or subjects are helpful for the future?
I think English will be very helpful for the future because English is essential today. When we work, we have to talk with foreigners sometimes. So if we learn English it will be very helpful for us.

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Hi Se Won,
Thank you for making your Essay. You have good answers and ideas about every question. However, I want you to expand your horizon or knowledge about English including vocabulary, grammar, and pronunciation to give better answers. You could do this by elaborating your answers and explaining some points further. I had never questioned your potential because at the very start of our class you had maintained your good skills so I hope that you will persevere more. ~ Teacher QUENNY 


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What courses or subjects do you think should be added to school?
>> What courses or subjects do you think should be added to school?(CORRECT) 
I think there are enough subjects in school now. So, I don¡¯t want to add any subjects or courses to school. In Korea, there are many subjects to do, there is Korean, society, history, math, science, English, technology and assumption, moral, etc.
>> There are lots of subjects we are studying now at school and I don't want to add any more subjects or courses to our school.  In Korea, there are many subjects to study, there is Korean, including society, history, math, science, English, technology and assumption, morals, etc., and these subjects are already difficult to study so it will more be difficult for me we add more subjects to study and I can't concentrate well to my studies. 
What courses or subjects are helpful for the future? 
>> What courses or subjects are helpful for the future? (CORRECT) 
I think English will be very helpful for the future because English is essential today. When we work, we have to talk with foreigners sometimes. So if we learn English it will be very helpful for us.
>> Of course, English subject is indeed crucial in our daily lives nowadays as it assists us in order to know or understand what is occurring in the world today. It is also the language of international communication, the media, and the internet. Knowing English increases our chances of getting a good job in a multinational company within our home country or finding work abroad. And understanding the importance of English will help us reach our goals for the future. 
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What courses or subjects do you think should be added to school?
I think there are enough subjects in school now. So, I don¡¯t want to add any subjects or courses to school. In Korea, there are many subjects to do, there is Korean, society, history, math, science, English, technology and assumption, moral, etc.
What courses or subjects are helpful for the future?
I think English will be very helpful for the future because English is essential today. When we work, we have to talk with foreigners sometimes. So if we learn English it will be very helpful for us.
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