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Do you believe that mistakes make people better? Please explain your answer.

I think mistake makes people better. Because when we make mistakes, it cause bad result. Through that experience, we learn many lesson.

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Exactly, Emily! Mistakes also teach us how we should behave in life. Anyway, try to avoid starting your sentence with 'because'. You may combine it with the sentence before it or try to find similar expressions of 'because' that is appropriate to the sentence.-Faith-
Do you believe that mistakes make people better? Please explain your answer.
>> CORRECT
I think mistake makes people better. 
>> I think mistakes make people better. 
Because when we make mistakes, it cause bad result. 
>> When we make mistakes, it has bad results.
Through that experience, we learn many lesson.
>> Through that experience, we learn many lessons.
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