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Is change always good?

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I don't think change is good all the time because things could go from bad to worse. Improvement is not available at all times when you change something. For example, every business tries to improve its profits all the time. However, It's not as easy as they think it is because improvement on profits takes good strategy, investment, people's passion for them, and more, you name it. Therefore, change can't be good all the time and good change is not that easy.

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Good afternoon, Steve! ^^,)

Change is inevitable; growth is optional. Change is not always a good thing. It may force us out of tired habits and impose better ones upon us, but it can also be stressful, costly and even destructive. (source: INEOS website)

I really appreciate you finishing your homework. I wholeheartedly concur with your views. I will see you later in class.^^

__T. Mayleen :)


I don't think change is good all the time because things could go from bad to worse.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: Because things could get worse before they get better, I don't believe change is always positive.

Improvement is not available at all times when you change something.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: t's not always possible to improve anything when you make a modification.

For example, every business tries to improve its profits all the time.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: For instance, every company always aims to increase earnings.

However, It's not as easy as they think it is because improvement on profits takes good strategy, investment, people's passion for them, and more, you name it.
>>> However, it's not as easy as they think it is because improvement in profits takes good strategy, investment, people's passion for them, and more. You name it.
>>> OR: However, it's not as simple as they want it to be because increasing earnings requires a solid strategy, money, and the enthusiasm of customers, among other things. Your choice.

Therefore, change can't be good all the time and good change is not that easy.
>>> Therefore, change can't be good all the time, and good change is not that easy.
>>> OR: Because of this, change cannot always be for the better, and good change is not always simple.
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