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Which is better, shopping in shops or shopping online?

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of course shopping online. because when we shopping in shops, there are many things which bother me to shop. like crowded people, noisy sound and so kind clerk. first of all, i want to shop alone with any bothering. but in shopping mall there are some kind clerks. And they always want to talk with me. so i cant concentrate at shopping. and also you know there are so many people in mall right? The sound they made makes me confused. so i love to shop at online. it is much cheaper than mall and also no one bother me.

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Hello 
Wow!  You made your homework early tonight.  I appreciate the effort.  Keep on practicing the correct grammar patterns and get used to them.  ^^

~T. Maine

of course shopping online. because when we shopping in shops, there are many things which bother me to shop. 
>> Of course, I prefer shopping online because when we go to the shops, there are many things which bother me. 

like crowded people, noisy sound and so kind clerk.
>> Examples of these are crowded people, noisy background sounds, and kind clerks. 

 first of all, i want to shop alone with any bothering.
>> First of all,  I want to shop alone without anything bothering me. 

 but in shopping mall there are some kind clerks.
>> But in shopping malls, there are some kind clerks. 
 And they always want to talk with me. 
>> They always want to talk with me. 

so i cant concentrate at shopping. 
>> So I can't concentrate on shopping. 

and also you know there are so many people in mall right? 
>>And also you know, there are so many people in the mall. 

The sound they made makes me confused. so i love to shop at online. 
>>The sound they make makes me confused, so I love to shop online. 

it is much cheaper than mall and also no one bother me.
>> It is much cheaper than the mall and no one could bother me. 



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