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On the Internet, you can say whatever you want. Is that true? Is it a good or a bad thing? Why?

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Actually we can say whatever we want on the Internet.
There are some codes for this kind of crimes, but it is hard to punish them all.
Because of this reason, a lot of people say whatever they want on the Internet.
But the ways for punishing them is developing every time.
They will be caught sometime, and they will be punished by the justice.
So, I think we mustn't commit the crimes on the Internet.

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Hello John!
Thanks for being aware. I heard some stars took their own lives because they got depressed due to the hate comments they read on the internet. We have to be more responsible with what we post on the internet. Have a happy long weekend! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

Actually we can say whatever we want on the Internet.
>>CORRECT!
There are some codes for this kind of crimes, but it is hard to punish them all.
>>CORRECT!
Because of this reason, a lot of people say whatever they want on the Internet.
>>CORRECT!
But the ways for punishing them is developing every time.
>>But the ways for punishing them is continuously developing.
They will be caught sometime, and they will be punished by the justice.
>>They will be caught at some point, and they will be brought to justice.
So, I think we mustn't commit the crimes on the Internet.
>>CORRECT!
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