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Q. There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

A.There si too much noise in the city.Because People speak loudly.People can speak quiet to solve problem.

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A.There si too much noise in the city.Because People speak loudly.People can speak quiet to solve problem.
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