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What comes to mind whenever you hear the word \'YOUNG\'?

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What come to me about youth can be changeable when it comes to when I hear the word 'young'. I mean its meaning can be different according to my age. When I was at around 20, I didn't know what it meant to me to be young. I felt as thought I was always young and youth is something natural for me. However, I was over 40, I realized youth is not forever. I came to know it by seeing my father getting older and weaker. My father had been a strong and energetic man for me all the time. I hadn't thought that my father was getting old. After finding my father's physical and mental changes as he was getting old, I found I was old, too. I had to be more careful about my health which I didn't care about when I was at around 20. Now youth is something to envy. I don't mean that I am not young any more. I still have many dreams to come true, I don't have any trouble physically and mentally. However, now I realized how precious youth is for me.

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Good evening, Steve! ^-^

I always hear the expression, "Age is just a number." However, a lot of things change as a person ages, such as declining physical strength and deteriorating health.

Thank you so much for this composition. I've read it well. Also, I have made some modifications. If you have questions, let's discuss them later in class. See you!^^

__T. Mayleen :)


What come to me about youth can be changeable when it comes to when I hear the word 'young'. I mean its meaning can be different according to my age.
>>> What comes to me about youth can be changeable when it comes to when I hear the word "young". I mean, its meaning can be different according to my age.
When I was at around 20, I didn't know what it meant to me to be young. I felt as thought I was always young and youth is something natural for me. However, I was over 40, I realized youth is not forever.
>>> When I was around 20, I didn't know what it meant to me to be young. I felt as though I was always young, and youth is something natural for me. However, once I was over 40, I realized youth is not forever.
I came to know it by seeing my father getting older and weaker. My father had been a strong and energetic man for me all the time. I hadn't thought that my father was getting old.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: My father's aging and weakening helped me to realize it. For me, my father had always been a powerful and vivacious man. I had no idea my dad was getting older.
After finding my father's physical and mental changes as he was getting old, I found I was old, too. I had to be more careful about my health which I didn't care about when I was at around 20.
>>> After finding my father's physical and mental changes as he was getting old, I found I was old, too. I had to be more careful about my health, which I didn't care about when I was around 20.
>>> OR: I discovered I was getting older after observing the physical and mental changes associated with aging in my father. My health was more important now, when it wasn't when I was around 20.
Now youth is something to envy. I don't mean that I am not young any more. I still have many dreams to come true, I don't have any trouble physically and mentally. However, now I realized how precious youth is for me.
>>> Now, youth is something to envy. I don't mean that I am not young any more. I still have many dreams to come true. I don't have any trouble physically or mentally. However, now I realize how precious youth is to me.
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