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My hometown is Daejeon. Daejeon is a Metropolitan City in Korea. And Daejeon is famous for science city because there are many science museums in Daejeon. Also, it is in middle of Korea.

The tourist destinations of Daejeon are O-world, many science museums and mountains. The mountains of Daejeon is beautiful such as Sikjangsan Mountain and Gyejoksan Mountain.
Anyway, I like my hometown Daejeon very much.

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Great effort in your homework, Kim Ye Kyeom! I am very glad that you were able to accomplish this one today. Keep up the passion and eagerness to learn the English language. With that kind of effort and perseverance, you'll reap good fruit! :)


My hometown is Daejeon.
>> Correct.
Daejeon is a Metropolitan City in Korea.
>> Correct.
And Daejeon is famous for science city because there are many science museums in Daejeon.
>> It is famously know as "Science City", because there are many Science museums there.
Also, it is in middle of Korea.
>> It's also in the middle of Korea.
The tourist destinations of Daejeon are O-world, many science museums and mountains.
>> One tourist destination in Daejeon is O-world, where you can find many Science museums and beautiful mountains.
The mountains of Daejeon is beautiful such as Sikjangsan Mountain and Gyejoksan Mountain.
>> Sikjangsan and Gyejoksan are some of the beautiful mountains in Daejeon.
Anyway, I like my hometown Daejeon very much.
>> Correct. OR I like my hometown Daejeon very much.
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