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What were the lessons that you¡¯ve learned from that time of difficulty?
The most difficult time was when I immigrated to Canada. I didn¡¯t know how to speak English and French, so I should have learned two languages and it was a big lesson for me. In this term, I learned if we don¡¯t do any efforts, we should not gain anything.
How did your perspective in life change because of that difficulty?
I had to study two languages in Montreal, which was very difficult. Just learning one language is difficult, but speaking two languages is very difficult. So this made me hard, and I had a lot of difficulties in communication.
Who is the one person you can always count on in times of difficulties?
It was my first French teacher in Montreal. When I couldn¡¯t understand something, he always helped me kindly and he gave me high score of French exams.

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Thank you for writing an essay and answering the writing task I gave you. This will help you to say something for yourself using the ideas of the subject, for you to present ideas you have learned in your own way. And you will develop and expand ideas or arguments and include supporting evidence.  ~ Teacher QUENNY..

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What were the lessons that you¡¯ve learned from that time of difficulty?
>> What were the lessons that you learned from that time of difficulty?
The most difficult time was when I immigrated to Canada. I didn¡¯t know how to speak English and French, so I should have learned two languages and it was a big lesson for me. In this term, I learned if we don¡¯t do any efforts, we should not gain anything.
>> The most difficult time of my life was when I migrated to Canada. I didn't have knowledge of their language and I didn't know how to speak the two languages English and French and it was a big lesson for me. I realized that I must plan and study my actions before doing them and if we don't do any efforts we will not achieve and gain anything in our life. 

How did your perspective in life change because of that difficulty?
>>
I had to study two languages in Montreal, which was very difficult. Just learning one language is difficult, but speaking two languages is very difficult. So this made me hard, and I had a lot of difficulties in communication.
>> I studied the two languages in Montreal, which was very difficult for me. Just learning one language is already crucial but speaking the two languages is more challenging for me. So this made me a determined person. I still had a lot of difficulties in communication that I need to improve. And I can say that life is not easy and there are lots of challenges in life we will encounter and need to overcome that will make us strong and determined people. 
Who is the one person you can always count on in times of difficulties?
>>
It was my first French teacher in Montreal. When I couldn¡¯t understand something, he always helped me kindly and he gave me high score of French exams.
>> My first French teacher is the person I can always count on while I was studying the French language in Montreal. When I couldn¡¯t understand something, he always helped me. He's a kind person because he gave me a high score on my  French exams.

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What were the lessons that you¡¯ve learned from that time of difficulty?
The most difficult time was when I immigrated to Canada. I didn¡¯t know how to speak English and French, so I should have learned two languages and it was a big lesson for me. In this term, I learned if we don¡¯t do any efforts, we should not gain anything.
How did your perspective in life change because of that difficulty?
I had to study two languages in Montreal, which was very difficult. Just learning one language is difficult, but speaking two languages is very difficult. So this made me hard, and I had a lot of difficulties in communication.
Who is the one person you can always count on in times of difficulties?
It was my first French teacher in Montreal. When I couldn¡¯t understand something, he always helped me kindly and he gave me high score of French exams.
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