¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ì
2022-08-09 792

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hello, Donna.
It's past 10 pm and it's pouring outside.
Today, I drove my family car that is a SUV, thus I felt more safer than yesterday.
Tomorrow evening, we have an important contract about new clinic in Seoul.
So, I am worried about the weather.
I hope that tomorrow will be fine.
Today, we started new topic about music.
As you know it, I love music.
I sing a song and listen to music everyday.
There are many kinds of music in the world.
Among them, I love a rock music the most.
In my college days, I was a vocal in my band.
I don't think I was a good singer, but I had a big voice and a special show manship.
In my stage, I used to jump and dance strongly.
Someday I will return the stage. LOL.
Anyway, at that time, our band used to copy old rock musics like "Runaway", "Welcome to the jungle", "We will rock you", and so on.
My best copy song is "Sarang two" that is a Korean song by YB.
Sadly, I probably caught a cold.
I've got to sleep now.
See you tomorrow morning.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë


Good morning once again, Dr. Kim!

Music is one thing that unites people regardless of race, age, and social status. Lately, streaming is a very convenient trend to access our favorite hit tracks. More than a decade ago, watching live concerts and performances and, watching television, and listening to the radio are the means to enjoy this hobby. I was previledged to hear in class about your heyday in your band career as a vocalist. The intensity on the stage when you perform must be massive. Of course, this comes from a painstaking time of practice and a lot of issues and patience within the band and every member. They say, it was the best while it lasted, thus, I am sure the memories you had will last a lifetime.

I hope that your colds and your weather improves this Wednesday. Best of luck on your business contract signing tonight!

Thank you for sharing this very interesting part of your life about music. Your sentences are simple in structure but displays complex meaning. A few suggestions I made are some basic grammar rules. Go over them well.

Music lives in the heart and it is everywhere we go. Have a fantastic day! See you soon.

-T. Donna~

Hello, Donna.
>> Correct!

It's past 10 pm and it's pouring outside.
>> Correct!

Today, I drove my family car that is a SUV, thus I felt more safer than yesterday.
>> Today, I drove my family car that is an SUV, thus, I felt safer than yesterday.

Tomorrow evening, we have an important contract about new clinic in Seoul.
>> Tomorrow evening, we have an important contract about the new clinic in Seoul.
Or: Tomorrow night, we have an important contract about the new clinic in Seoul.

So, I am worried about the weather.
>> Correct!

I hope that tomorrow will be fine.
>> Correct!

Today, we started new topic about music.
>> Today, we started a new topic about music.

As you know it, I love music.
>> Correct!

I sing a song and listen to music everyday.
>> Correct!

There are many kinds of music in the world.
>> Corerct!

Among them, I love a rock music the most.
>> Among them, I love rock music the most.

In my college days, I was a vocal in my band.
>> In my college days, I was a vocalist in my band.

I don't think I was a good singer, but I had a big voice and a special show manship.
>> Correct!

In my stage, I used to jump and dance strongly.
>> Correct!

Someday I will return the stage. LOL.
>> Correct! 

Anyway, at that time, our band used to copy old rock musics like "Runaway", "Welcome to the jungle", "We will rock you", and so on.
>> Anyway, at that time, our band used to copy old rock (music/songs) like "Runaway", "Welcome to the jungle", "We will rock you", and so on.

My best copy song is "Sarang two" that is a Korean song by YB.
>> My best cover song is "Sarang two" that is from Korean singer YB.

Sadly, I probably caught a cold.
>> Correct!

I've got to sleep now.
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow morning.
>> Correct!
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
120686 [Homework] What culture did you know about Austria after staying... ÃÖ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-07-13 1
120685 What is one of the best choices you made lately? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 4
120684 What is your opinion about people with tattoos? Explain your... ÀÌ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 218
120683 7/12 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 538
120682 What¡¯s the best thing to do to minimize heatstroke in hot... ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 476
120681 Homework ÀÌ*¸í ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 195
120680 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 1
120679 Homework for 12.07.2022 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 1
120678 homework ¹Ú*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 206
120677 . ÇÑ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 1
120676 What is the name of the disease you fear most? Why? ÇÑ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 4
120675 What I\'m afraid about ±è*¿± ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 775
120674 If you could be invisible for a couple of hours, what would you... ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 267
120673 homework ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 2
120672 What do you do to look after your skin? Do you like the color of... ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 660
120671 Homework ÀÌ*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 298
120670 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 312
120669 What is your favorite room in your house? Why? ±è*°â ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 208
120668 Do you think robots or AI will replace human teachers in the... ·ù*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 394
120667 s it better for kids to have siblings? ä*¼® ¿Ï·á 2022-07-12 222

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04