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Why are \"GREETINGS\" important before we start a conversation? / What other ways could you think of

작성자: 박*태
2022-08-09 957

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Hello Teacher QUENNY...:)
I write some sentence regard to upper question....
Many people live in their own lives, even if they might have been struggle to fight togerher with their own lives. That means, People in the earth( ^^ ) have a better way to get talking with good and smooth atmosphere. even so whether their lives happy or unhappy
In this reason, I suggest that kind people may contribute better place to live and talk to strangers more naturally.
So, GREETINGS is more important attitude rather than ignoring or disregarding someone who was related to take moment together
and, Second question is what other ways could you think of greet people
It`s hard question for me to write down some valuable message.
Even though I`ll speak up some points which takes a consideration into more things specifically.
Firstly, handshake. These days, many people don`t want to get familiar with others.
Fast changing world, Disrupted technology, and so on. Briefly, teacher QUENNY too long cut off my.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용


Hi Justin, 
The greeting is one of the basic functions of communication and triggers positive conversations. It helps us connect to people at a more personal level. And every greeting and introduction is an opportunity to demonstrate respect for others and to create a favorable impression of yourself to others. When you greet someone, you acknowledge their presence. Most people do this automatically and barely notice they're doing it. ! Teacher QUENNY.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I write some sentence regard to upper question
>> I write some sentences regarding the upper question.
Many people live in their own lives, even if they might have been struggle to fight togerher with their own lives. 
>> Many people live in their own lives, even if they might have been struggling to fight together with their own lives. 
That means, People in the earth( ^^ ) have a better way to get talking with good and smooth atmosphere. even so whether their lives happy or unhappy
>> That means People on the earth( ^^ ) have a better way to talk with a good and smooth atmosphere even so whether their lives are happy or unhappy
In this reason, I suggest that kind people may contribute better place to live and talk to strangers more naturally.
>>For this reason, I suggest that kind people may contribute better place to live and talk to strangers more naturally.
So, GREETINGS is more important attitude rather than ignoring or disregarding someone who was related to take moment together
and, 
>> So, GREETINGS is a more important attitude rather than ignoring or disregarding someone who was related to taking a moment together.
Second question is what other ways could you think of greet people
>>The second question is what other ways could you think of greeting people? 
It`s hard question for me to write down some valuable message.
>> It`s a hard question for me and I can't think to write down some valuable message.
Even though I`ll speak up some points which takes a consideration into more things specifically.
>> Even though I`ll speak up some points which take consideration into more things specifically.
Firstly, handshake. These days, many people don`t want to get familiar with others.
>> Firstly, handshake. These days, many people don`t want to get familiar with other because of the fast-changing world and disrupted technology, and so on.
 Briefly, teacher QUENNY too long cut off my.
>>  Briefly, Teacher QUENNY kindly fix my too-long essay. 
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Hello Teacher QUENNY...:)
I write some sentence regard to upper question....
Many people live in their own lives, even if they might have been struggle to fight togerher with their own lives. That means, People in the earth( ^^ ) have a better way to get talking with good and smooth atmosphere. even so whether their lives happy or unhappy
In this reason, I suggest that kind people may contribute better place to live and talk to strangers more naturally.
So, GREETINGS is more important attitude rather than ignoring or disregarding someone who was related to take moment together
and, Second question is what other ways could you think of greet people
It`s hard question for me to write down some valuable message.
Even though I`ll speak up some points which takes a consideration into more things specifically.
Firstly, handshake. These days, many people don`t want to get familiar with others.
Fast changing world, Disrupted technology, and so on. Briefly, teacher QUENNY too long cut off my.
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