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Do you worry about cybercrime?

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Yes, I worry about cybercrime.
Cyber criminal are treaten some people. They hacking other people's phone and than get some impormation on the phone. They demand in money for impormation.
If some elderly who don't know well about the internet.
They might conned for criminal. People might lose their money.
And some bad people tempt young girl out of the house for internet community. They kidnap her to sleep and they crime to them. Cybercrime is dangerous about personal impormation and
not only this it can be a financial crime, violence even murder.
So I protect my phone not to be hacked.

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Hello Eun Chae!
Cybercrime is really scary, isn't it?  Since we are living in a technological world, it is really necessary to watch out for criminals around.  Take care!^^


-T. Maine


Yes, I worry about cybercrime.
>>Correct. 
Cyber criminal are treaten some people. 
>> Cyber criminals threaten some people. 
They hacking other people's phone and than get some impormation on the phone.
>>They hack other people's phones and then get some information on the phone. 
 They demand in money for impormation.
>>They demand some money for information. 
If some elderly who don't know well about the internet. 
They might conned for criminal.
>> If the elderly don't know well about the internet, he or she might be conned for criminal acts. 
>>OR: These hackers might use the elderly's knowledge of internet use to steal some money. 
 People might lose their money.
>> Correct. 
And some bad people tempt young girl out of the house for internet community.
>> And some bad people tempt young girls out of their houses for the internet community. 
 They kidnap her to sleep and they crime to them. 
>> They can kidnap them to sleep and they commit crimes to them. 
Cybercrime is dangerous about personal impormation and
not only this it can be a financial crime, violence even murder.
>> People steal the personal information of others in cybercrime.  Not only this, but it can also become a financial crime, violence, and even murder. 
So I protect my phone not to be hacked.
>> Correct. 

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