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ESSAY: Nowadays both men and women spend a lot of money on beauty care. This was not so in the past. What may be the root cause of this behavior? Discuss the reasons and possible results.

Recently, I can find oftenly that men make up when they go out.
Even my husband also use women's cosmetics. specially he likes BBcream.
It is very natural things that human want to be a good looking regardless of gender.
In the past, beauty care stuffs are not easy to found but now, we can buy those stuffs everywhere even at the convenience store.
Nowdays, men are exposed cosmetics and beauty care things everyday therfore men cannot help getting interested in beauty as well.
Because to pursue the beauty is the human nature.
well, I am going to have to put a face mask pack for my skin tonight. hihihihi

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Hi Ms. Eunice! Thanks for answering the essay. REAL MEN in my country don't wear make up ( I said REAL MEN because gays and lesbians are rampant in my country. Some gays dress like a man but their voice is different HAHAHAHA). If they do, they will be suspected as "GAYS" hahaha! They instead use lotion or moisturizers but not BB cream. With our skin color, men would really look like gays if they use BB cream. Hahaha! For me, I wear make up when I go out. It brightens my face. If I don't, I look sick. Hihihi!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Recently, I can find oftenly that men make up when they go out.
>>> Recently, I could find men who often wear make up when they go out.
Even my husband also use women's cosmetics. specially he likes BBcream.
>>> My husband also uses women's cosmetics especially, he likes BB cream.
It is very natural things that human want to be a good looking regardless of gender.
>>> It is very natural for humans to desire to be  good-looking regardless of gender.
In the past, beauty care stuffs are not easy to found but now, we can buy those stuffs everywhere even at the convenience store.
>>> In the past, beauty care stuff were not easy to find but now, we can buy those stuff everywhere even at the convenience store.
Nowdays, men are exposed cosmetics and beauty care things everyday therfore men cannot help getting interested in beauty as well.
>>> Nowadays, men are exposed to cosmetics and beauty care products every day therefore men cannot help getting interested in beautifying as well.
Because to pursue the beauty is the human nature.
>>> Because to pursue beauty is human nature.
well, I am going to have to put a face mask pack for my skin tonight. hihihihi
>>> Well, I am going to put a face mask pack for my skin tonight. hihihihi
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