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Why do you think people started leaving the rural areas and moved to cities?

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Why do you think people started leaving the rural areas and moved to cities? What do you think are its negative effects?

These days, there are variety specialized job and cultures. Plus, there are restaurants and amenities are concentrated in the city. But rural areas are not. Thus rural people want to use them and get some employed not farming. But rural areas should be manage by someone. So that people in the Earth could buy rice or vegetables. So some of them should work at rural areas. And also working at the rural areas also is specialized job and necessary branch of humans life.

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Good afternoon Harry. ^_^
Thank you for finding the time to answer this essay question. 
It's true that many people don't want to live and farm in the rural areas anymore. 
Sadly, without the farmers, people would go hungry. :(
I think the government should find a way to modernize farming in order to produce enough crops for food. 
By the way, I hope you're feeling better now. 
I'll see you again on Wednesday. ^^
~Teacher Charry

These days, there are variety specialized job and cultures. 
>> These days, there are various specialized jobs and lifestyles. 
Plus, there are restaurants and amenities are concentrated in the city. 
>> Plus, there are restaurants and amenities  that are concentrated in cities. 
But rural areas are not. 
>> But in rural areas, there aren't any. 
Thus rural people want to use them and get some employed not farming. 
>> Thus, rural people want to experience them and get employed in cities instead doing farming. 
But rural areas should be manage by someone. 
>> But the farms in the rural areas should be managed by someone. 
So that people in the Earth could buy rice or vegetables. 
>> So that the people would have enough rice or vegetables to buy. 
So some of them should work at rural areas. 
>> So, some people should still work in the rural areas. 
And also working at the rural areas also is specialized job and necessary branch of humans life.
>>  In addition, farming in the rural areas is also a specialized job which is a necessary branch in human survival. 
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