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What is your opinion about the article \"Gender Equality\"?

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Actually, I don't care about it, because it hasn't an effect of my life. But I'm able to respect that article, so that we should live well with each other. But it's not a reality. Most likely, I guess there are someone who need to express their anger.

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Hello there, Elic! Good job with your sentence construction in this homework. As you can see, there are some that need improvements, but there is also one which you got correctly. You're doing great so keep it up. "If you run into a wall, don't turn around and give up. Figure out how to climb it" as Michael Jordan would say. Please never give up, I am very proud of you, Elic. :)


Actually, I don't care about it, because it hasn't an effect of my life.
>> I actually don't care about it, because it doesn't really affect my life.
But I'm able to respect that article, so that we should live well with each other.
>> But I respect the contents of the article and the people's gender equality rights, so that we could live well together.
But it's not a reality.
>> Correct.
Most likely, I guess there are someone who need to express their anger.
>> Furthermore, I believe that there is someone who needs to express their emotions.
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