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Is it better to stay at home on holiday or go somewhere?

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It is better to go somewhere on holiday than stay at home. Holidays are certain rest and no work day. So my whole family can have some rest days at the same time. It is good time that we are go to vacation together. When big holidays like Lunar new Year day, or Chuseok that even can go to another countrise. That days can have rest a few days.
It is also great to stay home and parites with family. but
hoildays are special for each days, so I want cerebrate the days in special spots. It will keep memories longer.
In fact, If I hang out my family, it is always happy and special wherever we are going.

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Hello Eun Chae!
Thanks for sharing this opinion.  Keep on writing and speak more in class. ^^

~T. Maine


It is better to go somewhere on holiday than stay at home. 
>> It is better to go somewhere on holiday than to stay at home. 
Holidays are certain rest and no work day.
>> Holidays are a certain time to take some rest and not go to work. 
 So my whole family can have some rest days at the same time.
>> Correct. 
 It is good time that we are go to vacation together.
>>It is a good time that we have to go on vacation together. 
 When big holidays like Lunar new Year day, or Chuseok that even can go to another countrise.
>> When big holidays like Luna New Year or Chuseok happen, we can go to other counties. 
 That days can have rest a few days.
>> Those days can give us rest in a few days. 
It is also great to stay home and parites with family.
>> It is also great to stay at home and have parties with my family. 
 but hoildays are special for each days, so I want cerebrate the days in special spots. 
>> But holidays are special for each day, so I want to celebrate the days in special spots. 
It will keep memories longer.
>> It will keep my memories longer. 
In fact, If I hang out my family, it is always happy and special wherever we are going.
>> If fact, if I hang out with my family, it is always a happy and special day whenever we go. 

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