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My younger sister is the most adventurous person in my family.
She is 14 years old and she like hiking.
When she go mountain ,she pick up the highest part of the mountain.
I think she is very active at everything.
Her active behavior is so irresponsible but her challenge spirit will lead her to grow up.

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Hello, Jin Seo! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

My younger sister is the most adventurous person in my family.
>>> CORRECT!

She is 14 years old and she like hiking.
>>> CORRECT!

When she go mountain ,she pick up the highest part of the mountain.
>>> When she goes mountain, she picks up the highest part of the mountain.

I think she is very active at everything.
>>> I think she is very active in everything.

Her active behavior is so irresponsible but her challenge spirit will lead her to grow up.
>>> Her active behavior is so irresponsible but her challenging spirit will lead her to grow up.
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