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What adjectives would you use to describe summer?

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Above all, summer is hot. Hot will be the most representative adjective for summer.

Summer is green as well. Thanks to hot weather and strong sunshine, nature can turn much greener than any other seasons. Grass and trees can grow high due to the high energy from the sun.

Summer is humid in Korea. As far as I know, some countries in land are not humid even in summer because they are far away from oceans. However, in peninsular countries like Korea and your country have high humidity in summer because of the geographical nature surrounded by the sea on three sides. No matter the reason for high humidity, I don't like sticky summer.

Lastly, Summer is good season for young people to meet or make their love bigger and bigger. I also met my wife in summer church retreat. Most people take a vacation and go nice places to get away or make a good memory between friends or family during summer season.

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Good afternoon, Steve! ^^,)

Thank you for this good composition. I've read it well.
Here's a beautiful quote about summer:
"And so with the sunshine and the great bursts of leaves growing on the trees, just as things grow in fast movies, I had that familiar conviction that life was beginning over again with the summer."
(-F. Scott Fitzgerald)

I will see you later in class. Enjoy the rest of your afternoon!^^

__Teacher Mayleen :)


Above all, summer is hot. Hot will be the most representative adjective for summer.
>>> Above all, summer is hot. "Hot" will be the most representative adjective for summer.


Summer is green as well.
>>> CORRECT
Thanks to hot weather and strong sunshine, nature can turn much greener than any other seasons.
>>> Thanks to hot weather and strong sunshine, nature can turn much greener than in any other season.
Grass and trees can grow high due to the high energy from the sun.
>>> Grass and trees can grow tall due to the high energy from the sun.


Summer is humid in Korea.
>>> CORRECT
As far as I know, some countries in land are not humid even in summer because they are far away from oceans.
>>> As far as I know, some countries on land are not humid even in summer because they are far away from the oceans.
However, in peninsular countries like Korea and your country have high humidity in summer because of the geographical nature surrounded by the sea on three sides.
>>> However, in peninsular countries like Korea and your country, there is high humidity in summer because of the geographical nature of being surrounded by the sea on three sides.
No matter the reason for high humidity, I don't like sticky summer.
>>> No matter the reason for high humidity, I don't like sticky summers.


Lastly, Summer is good season for young people to meet or make their love bigger and bigger.
>>> Lastly, summer is a good season for young people to meet or make their love grow bigger and bigger.
I also met my wife in summer church retreat.
>>> I also met my wife at a summer church retreat.
Most people take a vacation and go nice places to get away or make a good memory between friends or family during summer season.
>>> Most people take a vacation and go to nice places to get away or make a good memory with friends or family during the summer season.
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