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Why do you think that young people like you should travel?

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I think that young people like me should travel because young people have curious about other country's traditional things and activities. If I go to abroad,I want to enjoy that country's weather and games. As young people,they can enjoy more travel and more activities. Because they know to play activity more.

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I think that young people like me should travel because young people have curious about other country's traditional things and activities.
>>> I think that young people like me should travel because young people have curious about other countries' traditional things and activities.

If I go to abroad,I want to enjoy that country's weather and games. 
>>> If I go abroad, I want to enjoy that country's weather and games. 

As young people, they can enjoy more travel and more activities.  Because they know to play activity more.
>> Young people can enjoy traveling more because they know how to do and play different activities.
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