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What is your favorite movie? Describe it in detail and why you like it.

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my favorite movie is Three Idiots. It was published in 2009 in india. I saw this movie first time in my middle school, my age 15. when i saw this movie im so moved. because the movie tell us "Do what you want!". And you know, honestly i hate indi movie before, because the dance and music every scene. but 3idiot dance and songs are not that bad. and also it has humor and fun too. so i love it!

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Hello Robin!
There are many things you still need to improve in your grammar.  Try to follow the suggested patterns.  Check your verb tenses too. ^^


~T. Maine


my favorite movie is Three Idiots. 
>>My favorite movie is entitled Three Idiots. 
It was published in 2009 in india. 
>> It was published in 2009 in India.  
I saw this movie first time in my middle school, my age 15. 
>>I saw this movie for the first time in middle school when I was 15 years old. 
when i saw this movie im so moved. because the movie tell us "Do what you want!". 
>> When I saw this movie, I was so moved because the movie told us to do what we want. 
And you know, honestly i hate indi movie before, because the dance and music every scene. 
>>And honestly, I hate Indie movies before because of the musical scenes. 
but 3idiot dance and songs are not that bad. 
>> But Three Idiots' dances and songs are not that bad. 
and also it has humor and fun too. so i love it!
>> In addition, it also has some humor, so I love it!

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