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We should support our older family members only if they took care of us when we were children.
Especially in Korea, a lot of money is needed to raise a child.
Many parents spend more than 760 dollars a month training their children.
Therefore, if their children become an adult, most parents don't have much money to take care of themselves.
That's why I claim that if we got benefits from our parents, we should reward them.
However, if parents don't care for their children when they were children, we don't have to support them.
'Parents should raise their children as well as give birth to them.'
This upper sentence is one of the Korean sayings.
We can't call the people who gave birth to children but didn't raise them, parents.
Recently, I heard the news that celebrities' parents claim their authority to be supported by their children, even though they didn't care for them.
They shouldn't support them, because they just approached them to get a benefit from their children.

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Hi there Jiwon! Thanks for doing your essay! I was so surprised with your English skills now. You have improved a lot. Keep it up!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
We should support our older family members only if they took care of us when we were children.
>>> CORRECT
Especially in Korea, a lot of money is needed to raise a child.
>>> CORRECT
Many parents spend more than 760 dollars a month training their children.
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, if their children become an adult, most parents don't have much money to take care of themselves.
>>> CORRECT
That's why I claim that if we got benefits from our parents, we should reward them.
>>> CORRECT
However, if parents don't care for their children when they were children, we don't have to support them.
>>> CORRECT
'Parents should raise their children as well as give birth to them.'
>>> CORRECT
This upper sentence is one of the Korean sayings.
>>> This is one of the Korean sayings.
We can't call the people who gave birth to children but didn't raise them, parents.
>>> CORRECT
Recently, I heard the news that celebrities' parents claim their authority to be supported by their children, even though they didn't care for them.
>>> CORRECT
They shouldn't support them, because they just approached them to get a benefit from their children.
>>> CORRECT
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