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Hello, Donna.
Because it rains all day, my clinic is not so busy.
I ate lunch with my friend who got a daughter several days ago.
Those foods are great and expensive, he paid all of them with joy.
I ate too much, so now I have a fullness of my stomach, and it feels bad.
I actually like to eat some delicious foods, and sometimes I can't stop to eat, and regret every times.
Anyway, today's work is almost done, thus I can do my homework.
Today's homework is about the education.
As children are growing up, they are getting know many things.
There are so many things in the world including bad elements.
Hence, we should teach our children to watch out.
We can share experiences of ourselves and others to them.
And we can also recommend good books to them.
When our children did a bad behavior, we should let them know how badly they did.
We always have to stay away from bad things, and then our children do as same.
I want to know your opinion, because you also have a kid.
See you tomorrow.

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Hi, Dr. Kim! 

It is good to know that you had a smooth Monday. This kind of day is a gift. You ate a good meal with a friend and enjoyed much. It sounds like a perfect Monday to me. Well, I made kimchi chigae and me and my son had our tummy full quite like yours. ^^ Sometimes, eating becomes so much of a pleasure and we cannot stop. So, when I  got sick, I thought I was unhealthy and need to lose some weight. In your case, you always stay up late as well as work too hard, you deserve some very good meal- that's totally fine.

Anyway, education or awareness is vital in guiding our children. In fact, as young as we are, we have always heard of the word 'NO' and most of the time, these situations are the more important ones to know rather than those that we need to do. So, is punishment necessary? Must we make our children feel guilty of their innocent wrongdoings? Or, should we let them learn from their mistakes? Those that you mentioned below are very effective ways to make our kids alert and vigilant  against bad elements in society. We can only do so much to guide them but believe it or not, they are also learning fast from  their relationships in school, via the Internet, and by vacariate ones. There can't be one effective way of teaching our children to be safe. However, constant and consistent reminders as well as being a model parent to them are the basic foundations to their safety and well-being.

My suggestions are very easy to comprehend and follow. Kindly read them well. Your writing style is highly logical, organized, and thought provoking. Thank you for the time in writing a homework answer.

Good night.

-T. Donna~

Hello, Donna.
>> Correct!

Because it rains all day, my clinic is not so busy.
>> Correct!
Or: Because it rained all day, my clinic was not so busy.

I ate lunch with my friend who got a daughter several days ago.
>> Correct!

Those foods are great and expensive, he paid all of them with joy.
>> Correct!

I ate too much, so now I have a fullness of my stomach, and it feels bad.
>> I ate too much, so now I have fullness in my stomach and it feels bad.

I actually like to eat some delicious foods, and sometimes I can't stop to eat, and regret every times.
>> I actually like to eat some delicious foods and sometimes, I can't stop to eat, and regret afterwards.

Anyway, today's work is almost done, thus I can do my homework.
>> Correct!

Today's homework is about the education.
>> Today's homework is about education.

As children are growing up, they are getting know many things.
>> As children are growing up, they are getting to know many things.

There are so many things in the world including bad elements.
>> Correct!

Hence, we should teach our children to watch out.
>> Correct!

We can share experiences of ourselves and others to them.
>> Correct!

And we can also recommend good books to them.
>> Correct!
Or: (In addition/ Moreover,) we can also recommend good books.

When our children did a bad behavior, we should let them know how badly they did.
>> Correct!

We always have to stay away from bad things, and then our children do as same.
>> We always have to stay away from bad things, and then our children will do the same.

I want to know your opinion, because you also have a kid.
>> Correct!
Or: I want to know your opinion because you also have a kid.

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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