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Is peer pressure beneficial or harmful?

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Is peer pressure beneficial or harmful? Why?

I think colleagues don¡¯t always need to say good thing or condolence. If some of your colleagues was scolded by a superior officer, comforting them is nice work. But if you see him/her mistake again before superior officer see it, you have to give some pressure to your peer. Humans are always can make mistake and choose the wrong way. So they should be advised by others. It is necessary for humans to put pressure on whoever the target is.

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Hi, Harry! ^_^
Thank you very much for diligently doing your essay homework. I hope you're recovering well from your enteritis. 
I think peer pressure both have advantages and disadvantages. 
The positive kind can help you improve and strive harder at what you do but the negative kind can influence you to do bad things. 
I hope you're getting the positive kind from all of your peers. ^^
See you in class again tomorrow. Take care! :)
~Teacher Charry

I think colleagues don¡¯t always need to say good thing or condolence. 
>> I think colleagues don¡¯t always need to say good things or feel apologetic for their coworkers.
If some of your colleagues was scolded by a superior officer, comforting them is nice work. 
>> If some of your colleagues were scolded by a supervisor, comforting them is a nice work. 
But if you see him/her mistake again before superior officer see it, you have to give some pressure to your peer. 
>> But if you see him/her do the same mistake again, you have to pressure your peer to correct it before the supervisor sees it. 
Humans are always can make mistake and choose the wrong way. 
>> Humans can always make mistakes and may choose the wrong way. 
So they should be advised by others. 
>> CORRECT!
It is necessary for humans to put pressure on whoever the target is.
>> CORRECT!
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