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What do you think is the worst natural disaster?

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I think that, flood is the worst natural disaster. It's because, It happens quickly, so we don't have enough time to go to safety place. Floods cause of infectious disease. After flood, people should redintegrate their houses, they should be carefull the infectious disease.
Floods can distory sea enviroments. If lots of water flows into the sea, sea creatures can die. The water reduces salt rate of the sea.

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Good day, Sir Hwanny!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

I think that, flood is the worst natural disaster. 
>> CORRECT!
It's because, It happens quickly, so we don't have enough time to go to safety place. 
>> It's because, it happens quickly, so we don't have enough time to go to safe places. 
Floods cause of infectious disease. 
>> Floods cause infectious diseases. 
After flood, people should redintegrate their houses, they should be carefull the infectious disease.
>> After flood, people should redintegrate their houses, they should be careful with the infectious disease.
Floods can distory sea enviroments. 
>> Floods can destroy sea enviroments. 
If lots of water flows into the sea, sea creatures can die. 
>> CORRECT!
The water reduces salt rate of the sea.
>> CORRECT!

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