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HOMEWORK:
What is the common cause of divorce in your country? Share your answer in a few sentences.

Apparently, I saw the news about forties and fifties divorce couples their divorce rate is the highest among other age groups. When their children grow up, they divorce due to personality differences. It would be good to maintain their relationship, but they want to divorce for a variety of reasons as time goes on. I respect them and I think they are courageous.

I wasn't satisfied with my performance today. I will prepare well for the next time.

Have a happy weekend, Donna!

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Hello, Hae Ju! How's your Saturday? 

It is very sad to see couples parting ways because they got sick and tired of each other over the years. When love fades and two people do not want to work things out, divorce becomes inevitable.

Well, your performance yesterday was good. Perhaps you know yourself when you can do better. For this homework, you got almost perfect. So, I underlined my grammar suggestion so that you can easily see them.

Thank you so much for your diligence and for pushing yourself to do well always.

Have a good weekend!

-T. Donna~

Apparently, I saw the news about forties and fifties divorce couples their divorce rate is the highest among other age groups. 
>> Apparently, I saw the news about forties and fifties divorced couples and their divorce rate is the highest among other age groups. 

When their children grow up, they divorce due to personality differences. 
>> Correct!

It would be good to maintain their relationship, but they want to divorce for a variety of reasons as time goes on. 
>> Correct!

I respect them and I think they are courageous.
>> Correct!

I wasn't satisfied with my performance today. 
>> Correct!

I will prepare well for the next time.
>> Correct!
Or: I will prepare well next time.

Have a happy weekend, Donna!
>> Correct!
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