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What is your opinion of alternative medicine? Have you tried any alternative medicines?

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I think that alternative medicine is complementary to traditional medicine.
Although some people don't have a good condition of their bodies, they don't have to take medicine or do surgery necessarily.
In this case, they can try alternative therapies.
There are many kinds of alternative therapies in the world.
The two therapies reliable are acupuncture and massage.
Even though we couldn't prove their effects based on scientific research, I believe they have a positive impact on our health.
In my case, I always go to a massage shop whenever I have pain in my shoulder.
After getting a massage, I feel like my pain is already gone, and feel relaxed.
I am not sure it is a placebo effect but the fact is that I can feel relaxed, thanks to massage.
Therefore, I want to recommend trying alternative medicine only if they don't have to do surgery for their pain.

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Hey, Jiwon. Good job with this homework. I agree I believe surgery should be the last option and there are alternative therapies to be considered wisely. I hope you have a great day! See you in class. ~Jane <",) 


I think that alternative medicine is complementary to traditional medicine. 
>> CORRECT =) 

Although some people don't have a good condition of their bodies, they don't have to take medicine or do surgery necessarily. 
>> Although some people don't have good body condition, they don't have to take medicine or do surgery necessarily. 

In this case, they can try alternative therapies. 
>> CORRECT =) 

There are many kinds of alternative therapies in the world. 
>> CORRECT =) 

The two therapies reliable are acupuncture and massage. 
>> The two reliable therapies are acupuncture and massage. 

Even though we couldn't prove their effects based on scientific research, I believe they have a positive impact on our health. 
>> CORRECT =) 

In my case, I always go to a massage shop whenever I have pain in my shoulder. 
>> CORRECT =) 

After getting a massage, I feel like my pain is already gone, and feel relaxed. 
>> CORRECT =) 

I am not sure it is a placebo effect but the fact is that I can feel relaxed, thanks to massage. 
>> I am not sure it is a placebo effect but the fact is that I can feel relaxed, thanks to the massage. 

Therefore, I want to recommend trying alternative medicine only if they don't have to do surgery for their pain.
>> CORRECT =) 

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