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Good evening, Donna!
I am almost done with my works soon.
Because I squeeze my body in working, around this time everyday I am totally exhausted.
So, I always try to think about most of this situation positively.
And I hope to be used to these busy days.
Meanwhile today's homework is about a vice.
Actually I didn't know the meaning of the word exactly.
I just heard of vice from "Vice president"
Hence, I learned another meaning this morning class, and I am so glad to know that.
I think vices include alcohol, cigarette, cruel game, drug, and gamble.
As I told you, I used to smoke and play games too much.
However, I quit smoking about 10 years ago, and I have no time to play games now. What a pity...
Only I can do is just drinking alcohol.
I love to drink wisky with some delicious foods.
To encourage myself, I am planning to drink tonight.
Sometimes I have a bad condition because of drinking, and I often lose my control for drinking, thus, I should not drink too much.
Catch you tomorrow.

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Hi there!

By this time, you might be having a great time with your family after finishing all of your duties at work. It is paramount to keep a good attitude while doing tasks so that we can stay motivated and yield the best results in the job we chose to do. 

Vices are unpleasant behaviors that people do because they find satisfaction in them. However, these vices cause harm to them as well as others. Many of us have our own vices in different extents. Therefore, examining ourselves when to limit these activities may be good and eradicating these vices may improve the quality of our lives. 

Cheers to you and your hard work in your clinic as well as composing this homework answer tonight! Drink moderately and responsibly.

Good night, Dr. Kim.

-T. Donna~

Good evening, Donna!
>> Correct!

I am almost done with my works soon.
>> Correct!

Because I squeeze my body in working, around this time everyday I am totally exhausted.
>> Because I squeeze in a lot of work every day, my body is totally exhausted.

So, I always try to think about most of this situation positively.
>> Correct!

And I hope to be used to these busy days.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile today's homework is about a vice.
>> Meanwhile, today's homework is about vices.

Actually I didn't know the meaning of the word exactly.
>> Correct!

I just heard of vice from "Vice president"
>> Correct!
Or: I just heard of vice from "vice president".

Hence, I learned another meaning this morning class, and I am so glad to know that.
>> Hence, I learned another meaning this morning in class, and I am so glad to know that.

I think vices include alcohol, cigarette, cruel game, drug, and gamble.
>> I think vices include alcohol, cigarettes, cruel game, drugs, and gambling.

As I told you, I used to smoke and play games too much.
>> Correct!

However, I quit smoking about 10 years ago, and I have no time to play games now. What a pity...
>> Correct!

Only I can do is just drinking alcohol.
>> The only thing I can do is to drink alcohol.

I love to drink wisky with some delicious foods.
>> Correct!
Or: whiskey 

To encourage myself, I am planning to drink tonight.
>> Correct!

Sometimes I have a bad condition because of drinking, and I often lose my control for drinking, thus, I should not drink too much.
>> Correct!

Catch you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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