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What is the most romantic place in South Korea?

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I'm sure the most romantic place that is Lotte World. It's an amusement park and known for taking a picture in front of the merry-go-round. Also, most adults have school uniform dates there. So you can guess whether they're adults or not, if you visit there. Ones who are wearing school uniform are an adults, or ones who are wearing plain clothes are teenager. :)

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I'm sure the most romantic place that is Lotte World. 
>> CORRECT

It's an amusement park and known for taking a picture in front of the merry-go-round. 
>>It's an amusement park and it's known for taking pictures in front of the Merry-go-round. 

Also, most adults have school uniform dates there. 
>>Also, most teenagers have dates there. 

So you can guess whether they're adults or not, if you visit there. 
>> CORRECT

Ones who are wearing school uniform are an adults, or ones who are wearing plain clothes are teenager. :)
>> The ones who are wearing school uniforms are teenagers and the one  wearing casual clothes are teenagers. 

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