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What is the worst age to be and why?

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The worst age is twenty.it is becoming adult yet. When I was a student, I always look forward that age. But, becoming an adult is different than I imagined. It might make some wrong decitions and I have to take a responsibility of that result.
It's dangerous I'm still immature.
It might be coneed to scamer.it could be meet bad man.it will be a ex-boyfriend. And I have to work for the first time because parents don't give the pocket money anymore.
There are all the new things to me. It's confused and hard to be a real adult. But we also feel liberation.
It's a completely good thing but we have to be careful in twenty.

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Hello Eun Chae!
Read the corrections and if you have questions about the sentences, let me know in class.  Practice the correct grammar in your everyday speaking activities.  Keep on learning! ^^



~T. Maine


The worst age is twenty.it is becoming adult yet.
>>The worst age is twenty because it is nearly to adult. 
 When I was a student, I always look forward that age. 
>> When I was a student, I used to look forward to my age. 
But, becoming an adult is different than I imagined.
>>But becoming an adult is different than I imagined. 
 It might make some wrong decitions and I have to take a responsibility of that result.
>> It might take some wrong decisions and I have to take responsibility for the result. 
It's dangerous I'm still immature.
>> It's dangerous because I'm still immature. 
It might be coneed to scamer.it could be meet bad man.
>>It might be similar to a scammer and I could meet a bad man. 
it will be a ex-boyfriend. 
>> It might be my ex-boyfriend. 
And I have to work for the first time because parents don't give the pocket money anymore.
>>And I have to work for the first time because my parents will stop giving me some pocket money. 
There are all the new things to me.
>>There are all new things to me.
 It's confused and hard to be a real adult. 
>>It's confusing and hard to be a real adult. 
But we also feel liberation.
>> But we also feel liberation.
It's a completely good thing but we have to be careful in twenty.
>> It's a completely good thing but we have to be careful in the twenties. 

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