¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What is the worst age to be and why?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Àü*ä
2022-07-26 305

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

The worst age is twenty.it is becoming adult yet. When I was a student, I always look forward that age. But, becoming an adult is different than I imagined. It might make some wrong decitions and I have to take a responsibility of that result.
It's dangerous I'm still immature.
It might be coneed to scamer.it could be meet bad man.it will be a ex-boyfriend. And I have to work for the first time because parents don't give the pocket money anymore.
There are all the new things to me. It's confused and hard to be a real adult. But we also feel liberation.
It's a completely good thing but we have to be careful in twenty.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello Eun Chae!
Read the corrections and if you have questions about the sentences, let me know in class.  Practice the correct grammar in your everyday speaking activities.  Keep on learning! ^^



~T. Maine


The worst age is twenty.it is becoming adult yet.
>>The worst age is twenty because it is nearly to adult. 
 When I was a student, I always look forward that age. 
>> When I was a student, I used to look forward to my age. 
But, becoming an adult is different than I imagined.
>>But becoming an adult is different than I imagined. 
 It might make some wrong decitions and I have to take a responsibility of that result.
>> It might take some wrong decisions and I have to take responsibility for the result. 
It's dangerous I'm still immature.
>> It's dangerous because I'm still immature. 
It might be coneed to scamer.it could be meet bad man.
>>It might be similar to a scammer and I could meet a bad man. 
it will be a ex-boyfriend. 
>> It might be my ex-boyfriend. 
And I have to work for the first time because parents don't give the pocket money anymore.
>>And I have to work for the first time because my parents will stop giving me some pocket money. 
There are all the new things to me.
>>There are all new things to me.
 It's confused and hard to be a real adult. 
>>It's confusing and hard to be a real adult. 
But we also feel liberation.
>> But we also feel liberation.
It's a completely good thing but we have to be careful in twenty.
>> It's a completely good thing but we have to be careful in the twenties. 

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
121881 8/25 homework ¾È*Çå ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 964
121880 Thursday homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 867
121879 What can you do to make this world a better place? ÀÌ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 2
121878 homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 1
121877 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 1327
121876 Homework ¹Ú*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 3
121875 Be annoyed ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 2
121874 housing ±Ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 594
121873 homework ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 0
121872 Have you ever been the victim of a crime? Àü*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 4
121871 Caleb\'s homework for 23 Aug 2022 ±Ç*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 1763
121870 homework ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 1
121869 Which smartphone app is your favorite? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 1
121868 08.23.2022 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 1
121867 Is getting angry an effective way of dealing with problems? ÀÌ*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 540
121866 Can you talk about a person who has influenced your life? ÀÌ*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 1430
121865 What are the ways to prevent health problems? ÀÌ*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 1610
121864 Why the goals are important. ±è*¼º ¿Ï·á 2022-08-25 702
121863 8/24 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-08-24 1383
121862 How important do you think it is to use public transport? ¹Ú*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2022-08-24 1066

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04